Review for FINDING HIS TRUE SELF

FINDING HIS TRUE SELF

(#) Ithilwen 2006-03-09

Oooooooh-kay.

That was certainly different.

"Battlefield" is one word and you've got a run-on sentence in the first paragraph, but...

As for chapter two, you should either pick just one of these, or make the second chapter entirely different from the first. As is, it just looks like you couldn't make up your mind.