Review for Personalized stories?

Personalized stories?

(#) NoPainNoGain 2012-11-25


Fandom/category: My chem :)

Name: Niu Sung

Age: 19

Height/Weight: Average height and skinny with barely any curves

Looks:
Hair: Ebony black and pin straight just past her shoulders.

Eyes: Deep brown with thick black eyelashes.

Skin: slightly tanned with a yellowy undertone


Clothing: plain jeans or shorts and traditional Chinese waistcoats.


Personality: funny and kind, she's quite geeky too. She's fun to be around and is always there to help. She often makes people laugh when she messes up her English but she can get frustrated when she can't explain something.

Likes: Reading, Manga, swimming, music

Dislikes: when she forgets and starts speaking in mandarin


Very brief yet descriptive background story on the character: she was born an raised in Sha tin new territories, Hong Kong but ran away to America when her parents forced her to marry an abusive man.

Plot: Mikey and Niu have been pen pals for years . But when one of Niu's emails sounds off, he gets worried, then a week later she turns up on his doorstep with nothing but a backpack of clothes and a mysterious gold ring, he doesn't know what to think. She explains that she must stay in America for a while but won't tell Mikey or any of the others why. It could be him trying to get the reasons out of her maybe? But when he sees the bruises everywhere and confronts Niu about them, she blurts it all out (that she's married to a man she doesn't love and who abuses her constantly) and he admits his feelings and promises to help .
Possible fluffy, cute scene at the end?

Email address: flashlikehim@gmail.com

Thanks,
Flash x

Author's response

Nice :X