couple of things, not big but, Starfire is one word, and you repeatedly made it two but sometimes it was one. Another is a vampire has dull black or gray eyes and they need vampire blood in their system to help if they have just been tranformed into a vampire. Another is that you rated the first chapter with a x sex but there was nothing really wron with it. You also need to make sure that you have that correct if you ever creat another fan fiction. Very good and creative. Interesting and well written. A few spelling and grammer mastikes here and there but overall it was pretty good.