(#) Rous 2006-11-10
This is a very nice piece. The imagery is wonderful. Just a couple of things: a period after "...in the early dawn..." would close that thought, before jumping into the next one. Also, "...silence is filled around..." is very awkward. I am not exactly sure what you want to say here.
Lastly, a drabble should be 100 words, not counting the title. What you have is great, just not a drabble.
One reference for this is:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Drabble
It will give you some information on the genre.
Again, a very nice poem. I am off to check out some more.
Author's response
Thanks for the comment and suggestions!