Review for Truth
(#) Rous 2006-11-10
Again, a nice post. Your thoughts are coherent and concise. If you are going to capitalize the first word of the sentence, though, you need to follow through and do all of them.
"...the truth that leaves me
to quake and quiver at my knees..."
I am not sure "leaves" is the best word here. "leaves me quaking and quivering..." or "causes me to quake and quiver...". It is a subtle difference, but one, nonetheless.
"The longiness to tell
is forgotten..."
The word should be "longing".
Other than these few things, another good write.
Thank you for sharing.
rous
Author's response
ahh...thanks for the grammatical mistakes caught there...sometimes i just dont captalize words :P
but thanks for the tips :)