Review for (Trust Me)

(Trust Me)

(#) riza_lee 2012-11-29

Good job so far. This is just me so it's not a bad thing, but I don't like when writers jump from 1st person to 1st person. I feel like even though the writer says I'm reading for Frank now, or now it's Gerard, my head voice is still reading for the original 1st person. I like stories that only have one 1st person per chapter at least. It's just less confusing. Again, that's just me, your writing is really good so far and I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

Author's response

I was thinking of putting each character's POV in separate chapters because I actually get confused as well. The only problem was that Frank's POV was really short this time and that would have made it awkward. Hopefully, I'll be able to make it work better in future chapters. But thank you :3