Good story!
My greatest concern with this work is your disuse of the word "the" in the beginning of sentences (example, "The Headmaster ..." not "Headmaster ...")
Eagerly awaiting the sequel!
Author's response
I know my article usage sucks. That is simply because my mother's language doesn't have articles, and so they are completely foreign linguistic construct to me. I have tried my best to place them correctly, but obviously it wasn't enough. No wonder really. Thanks for reading! Random Shinobi