The wait definitely paid off, Crystal. This is high quality writing (but I think those "threw"s should be "through"s, not that it changes anything).
I so envy you about how you can focus on more than one character at a time and still make them so plastic, real and human.
I wasn´t able to check out the Greta/ Patrick website you gave as a footnote but I guess I´ll live. (For some reason I like BAARF a lot better than TPGS. :P) Thanks for adding the second (first now) footnote and pointing out that website. You rock.
Go ahead and put my writing to shame. ;) I love this.
Author's response
i have this wierd "threw" and "through" thing, i can't ever get them straight, and i sometimes do it with "their" and "there" too. so thanks, i went through and changed it. XD
i think it confuses a lot of people when i switch it up on POV's. but i like doing that, so thank you for liking it as well.
i seriously tried to think of something bettwe than TPGS, but my mind is jello today.