Review for Homeless

Homeless

(#) Mirazal 2012-12-09

The lovey-dovey stuff was adorable. Just, aww.
I cannot help but love Lindsey here. Like, definition of strong female lead. -nods-
This should be a movie. Seriously. Published as a novel or a movie.

I notice that the way you wrote this seemed kind of different... maybe it's just me. It was mostly storytelling and informative, but I really enjoyed it.
Please update again soon!

Author's response

I actually noticed that myself! I started writing a new fic (ill publish it after I finish this one) and I tried writing a little more descriptively with a little less dialogue. I find that dialogue can be a little awkward at times and its just easier to explain what happened as the narrator, rather than putting it simply as a characters voice. It's much more complex and enjoyable that way, or as it seems to me.