you didn't honestly think i would leave a shitty short review like that, did you? my computer hit enter and submitted that.
okay, so let me finish...
the fact that your main character obviously has a heart of gold (working with challenged children, which is really original, by the way) shows that she's a selfless person, and makes her a memorable character. the fact that she has a skeleton in her closet (based on the first couple of lines) mean drama-rama, and i'm so there.
introducing patrick (and the way the guys make fun of him, which made me laugh) gives the readers a sense of where he's at, and how he's feeling. i think describing patrick in a "funk" was pure genius, because we all go through that "i'm feeling older than i actually am" phase. or maybe it’s just me, either way i loved it.
you have nothing to worry about with this one. it's a hit.
Author's response
Thanks for the great feedback. As I finished writng the chapter last night, I was starting to feel much better.
Put your seatbelt on and allow for the ride of drama-rama to begin. Afterall, it is what I do best.