There are nice ideas underlying here! The dialogs are awesome, too. If I didn't know the script by heart, I would have thought they were taken from the game.
I can't wait to see where it's leading ^^
Author\'s Response: Hello, my friend! I'm so glad to be able delight an artist whose art really does inspire my writing! I'm glad I'm still managing to peg the voices for you; that matters to me more than anything else (especially since I'm not so great with plot. ;) ) (next chapter just posted, btw!)