Review for Athena's Children

Athena's Children

(#) plums 2013-06-23

Interesting premise, but your chapter length is horrible. Chapters in stories should never be single scenes. There are plenty of places you could have expanded things here. What were the details of the memories that were shared? How did he escape the Dursleys? What happened when the will was read? How exactly did he get in contact with his sister and get her information? How was his plane trip?