At first, wasn't sure about this. However, the more I read, the more I realized just how good the interactions and characterizations were. As it was, I was drawn in and read the entire thing in one go. That said, Epilogues which show how the heroes die depresses me. So, I'm a bit maudlin at the moment. Overall, I'd say this is a real winner. Major kudos.
Author's response
Hello, John Wolfe.
Thank you! I am…humbled that despite your initial reaction, you continued to read. I’ve always felt the interactions between characters, the characters themselves and the little details involved, are what makle a story interesting.
~As it was, I was drawn in and read the entire thing in one go.~ I do hope you got some sleep! To this point, you’ve read some 54,000 words. Don’t put your health or your job at risk for this story. It should still be there tomorrow.
You need not worry about becoming depressed at the end of this story. There will be no epilogue hero deaths here. The bad guys on the other hand…
Snicker!
Until next week,
Alorkin