I see the point of your response (whatever year it was written)about making it more interesting. It is a good story but the similar stories have been written. The tutor is a new twist as are the dance and martial arts lessons. But they have been done by you and others. You have other stories unfinished that ARE original and have great possibilities, IF you are still writing.
As far as I can tell you are not even responding to reviews. It is real loss for those of us who have become your readers.