Yay UPDATE! I loved this chapter really. It was overall so embarrassing for Em, I felt so incredibly bad for her. But the essay in indent is the kind of thing I wish I had the balls to do. Frank on the other hand... Hmm it's interesting because none of your characters are very straightforward in how they acted in this chapter.
I like that it's progressing. Em and Frank's relationship, Em possibly getting a job and more importantly, wanting something more out of her relationship with Gerard. Also, her giving up the drugs. That's pretty impressive and it gives so much scope for plot development.
It's a fun chapter but had some really nice developments in it. I loved it.
You can get as carried away as you want when you reply to my reviews. I really love talking to the author and sharing opinions. And I'm not completely shitty at talking like a normal person. I just get carried away reviewing.
Also I give you a+ for character development in this chapter.
Author's response
Your reviews make me sop happy. seriously. and it's not just the nice things you say, but the fact that you show such interest towards my little story that started out as a way to entertain my bored self..
so thank you, a lot!
I've been working on the next chapter for so long now, I hope you haven't completely given up on me!
I don't know why it's just not happening.. I've changed it a dozen times and I think I'm getting there, but wheh - who knew writing a simple chapter could get this hard? weird shit, man..
Annnnd over a week later:
Naturally, after getting frustrated over the chapter not being good and changing and re-writing it daily, I changed it back to the way it was to begin with and boom - there's an update. I hope to not disappoint everybody. I'm gonna really try my best to make the next one as interesting and eventful as possible!