you know I really love the my chem song refrences you scatter around in the story, it really gives me the feeling that it's the songs and stories of My Chemical Romance that inspires you to write. which is awesome.
I loved this chapter! You're really good at action!
I can sort of see why she covered up for Matt, though lying to Gerard didn't strike me as a good idea haha.
Often in fiction, and fan fiction in particular, everything is so black and white. People are either good or bad and there's no in between. I like the way you've presented Matt as a dickhead basically, but also show a more humane side of him on this chapter. It still doesn't make him an angel, but it definitely makes him human.
There's a lot of dickheads out there, really, but quoite a few of them are actually evil to the core, you know?
And though Matt has definitely been in a side role in the story, there's some badass character development here :)
You rock!
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