So, its a good idea and I like that the main characters are different races, since a lot of the stories on here are about white people or Hispanics.
The chapters are REALLY short though. In fact, you can almost get rid of the chapters and make the current story a whole chapter, or at least combine the chapters _._ into one, so your have like 3 or 4 chapters.
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That's because i'm typing it on my phone, and it doesn't let me type alot x.x so the chapters are actually cut in sections. that's why i numbered them funny like that. sorry if it's irritating