suck it, alex. i don't snore.
anyway, kudos to you for being able to post at 3 o'clock in the morning. that's pretty much amazing.
a couple of things in this chapter that helped make it more realistic and original. (apparently that's your forte, so...) i think the way you wrote in the flashback was very "flowable". pancakes > granola. haha.
okay, and i loved patrick at the end. not like "oh, how sweet" but like "god, that's so imperfectly patrick" so kudos to you for another job well done.
you serve DoJ proud. does that make sense? actually, no...no it doesn't.
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it's all good. i get what you're saying...
do you know how temtped i was to say..she was eating pancakes and granola...
so tempted..