You're lucky it's stopped raining for a few hours so I can get my head straight.
The lawyer's scene is amazing, I mean it, I was there with them, how you described all the mannerisms, the body language, the words. It was so moving.
You wrote Pete's feelings really truthfully too, the hint of his egotism coming through was just enough to sympathize with him and not want to smack the Emo growl off his face.
As usual, you raise the bar higher.
Nice work , seriously.
I feel my sincerity isn't coming through....but it should.
x
Author's response
Thank you. I was worried that Patrick is a bit clichéd. Well, YEAH, he is and that´s how you know it´s Patrick, I guess. ;) I´m not gonna concentrate on Joe and Andy though. Because... well... their names don´t start with a P. ;)
Ok, raising the bar higher... well, I guess with the DoJ the limbo dance time is over.