This is a really good story! I love your fics :3 and I'm really sorry and I promise I'm not trying to be a mean rude grammar bitch but I noticed you kept using whilst and realise and stuff but I'm really OCD and its gonna bother me until I say it but realize while the letter 'Z' is your friend
I'm really sorry I don't usually do this but its been bothering me for a while
Author's response
Haha thank you for the comment, don't worry any constructive criticism is valued. Though I just have to say, being English and all, I use British English when writing and I'm afraid we don't really like the letter Z all that much. And 21 years of education has made it practically impossible for me to type a z in realise or to write while instead of whilst. It's considered incorrect in British English and makes my skin crawl to see it, much the same way I'm sure it makes your skin crawl to see the British spelling.
No need to be sorry for bringing it up, it does amuse me that English is such a strange language :'D