Nice job, looking forward to more! I find it an interesting departure from most harem fics that you have Hinata gathering Naruto's harem rather than him doing it himself. That said, I wouldn't mind seeing some scenes to show Naruto with the defeated women, and/or Hinata revisiting them. It could definitely help with character development and allow the readers to revisit characters that they hadn't heard from for a while. Are the defeated women allowed to re-challenge her, or do they only get one chance? If they can, maybe there would be harsher consequences for failing a second time? Lastly, I'm not sure if you're taking suggestions for harem members but I'd definitely like to see Anko, Kurotsuchi, Shizuka (from the Nadeshiko filler episodes), Samui, Mabui, Hana and Tsume Inuzaka, Fu, and Konan. For crossover girls Seras from Hellsing, C.C. from Code Geass, Jibril from No Game No Life, Yoko from Guren Lagann, and Ryuko from Kill la Kill come to mind.
Author's response
Thanks and was thinking of some of them but i got some in mind and some were girls what i did not think off so i have some thinking to do i do hope to have both the next chapter and a one shot between raven and jinx from teen titans up before the end of november sorry for the long wait but irl has bin a major problem for the last few months because if i was not busy at work i am so tired i could sleep for a month but the next chapter and one shot are almost done so wait a little longer.
and for your suggestion wait and see because hinata will lose or tie whit a girl sometimes and lucky for her naruto got two last names