i love the brother/sister bonding between joe and lola. the whole ambiance thing...well, i lust after it. thank you for satisfying me on that level.
"What have you been up to?" /Was that a trick question?/haha. i shat myself a little bit. up to this point, alex is the only one who has been able to extract feces from me with her words. so kudos to you.
the stun gun warning was completely appropriate. pete is a douchebag, he knew she'd be there. but gah, patrick...always the good guy. and i love him for it.
i love the realization she came to at the end. the epiphany was perfect.
i pretty much can't say enough good things about your writing, and you pretty much know i'm in love with this story. but i feel like i owe you one of these:
:O
Author's response
mmmblowjobs....I mean, thank you :) Now I rival Alex in the excretion department...is that good? I'm going to assume it's good. E