Considering this is your first fic it's actually quite good, I enjoyed it. I found one small problem though, nine isn't bigger then ten lol, I think you just got the number wrong there though.
I have one piece of advice though with this being your first fic, always take bad reviews with a pinch of salt, I haven't seen any bad reviews in a long time but when I got my first bad review believe it or not but I was ecstatic because I then knew where I was going wrong. Just some advice there honey, I hope it helps.
S xx
Author's response
Thanks! That was actually a typo though. It's been fixed!