Oh and putting all the other girls in the story also makes no sense.
Seriously, why are you writing when you can't be any good at it?
Author's response
I'm writing because I enjoy it, and I'm actually writing other people's requests right now. Apart from His New Slave, all my storirs that are my own ideas are non-smut stories over at Fanfiction.Net. All of those are Harry-Hermione stories, at the moment. I've got one in the works which is a Harry-Tonks story.
Seriously, why does porn have to make sense? It doesn't. Every Harry Potter character behaves OOC in porn, of course they do, Harry Potter is a fucking children's book! Harry could barely even look at girls he fancied canonically, far less have sex.
Also, why are you looking for realism in Harry Potter, a story about wizards, dragons, elves and giants?
Finally, your flame reviews have litetally no meaning to me. I love to receive constructive criticism, but if you can't be bothered and just flame, then your opinion is worth nothing to me.
If you don't like the story that much, why are you still reading it? Methinks that suggests that you are an attention seeking troll. So, this is the last time I will take the time to respond to one of your reviews.