On my re-read through I've noticed that you do a good job at pacing too. It's sometimes a subtle thing and sometimes quite blatant, for example you'll cut out fights or whole potential interaction scenes as they're unimportant but focus on the parts which matter to the story.
I really like this as often a writer can get carried away on tangents that unfortunately aren't that interesting to the reader (I'm thinking of a particular book here which almost half of it I skipped through and missed nothing relevant to the plot : / )
This is more noticeable with the limelight and black book being separate as it's up to the reader if they're interested but the main work is a bit more streamlined.
I have to say that counter to this are the bulky sex scenes :P But that's the nature of the genre so no fault there.