"She might even be her reincarnate." Should be "her reincarnation" or "her, reincarnated."
"If you were to kidnap the girl, Lucian would come after her, as well as a number of other lycans." This means that Lucian would be coming after Marie and also after a bunch of lycans. I think you mean, "Lucian, as well as a number of other lycans, would come after her."
"Giver her some time, you'll see." (Shoots extra R with typo gun)
Hmm. And why is Marie upset enough to stalk out of the room? I must know more...
"Punished less severely" can mean so many things. Marcus offers to spare Kraven's life while reserving the right to yank out his fangs and use them for D&D conical dice. How delightfully prudent.