This honestly has been one of the best Ryden fics I’ve ever read. The writing is consistent and well done, and actual punctuation is wonderful to see. One thing you may want to work on is the amount of emotion you put into your words. Instead of telling us what’s in Brendon’s head, put us in his shoes. Show us. It overall makes it a lot more interesting, makes the smut more heated, and is just a good technique to use. This was pretty great though.