Why would Hermione go FROM Madam Pomfrey - the Nurse, TO McG, a Transfiguration prof, when she thought herself unwell?
It's like saying, 'my car is acting up, I think I'll go get golf lessons.'
Force-mind-fucking achievment Get!
On the squib gets you docked, using it on snivellus - ie, mind-fucking the scum that prides himself on his mind above all else - will get you extra cookies. You do like cookies, don't you?
Your Hedwig makes me happy, I enjoy the different ways that you've incorporated her personality into your tale.
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‘Toujurs Pur’: We got money so we’re better than you are. Erm…‘always pure.’
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Extra Points for Accuracy! :D
Why make him Uber OP, and give him the Force, but not have him use the Uber OP?