Holy fucking shit
Do you know how long your story is right now? It's more than 2 million words long. most novels are around 80,000 words long so instead of reading the top 10-20 american classics i decided to spend the last 2 months reading your erotic naruto fanfiction instead.
Goddamn worth it.
Obviously there are problems with your writing. There are still quite a few typos, though i'm glad you've figured out the difference between insure and ensure considering how much you use that word. I think you use the whole 'present day, then flashback' writing trope without sometimes making it clear when you jump back and forth between time periods.
But honestly those criticisms are pebbles when compared to the mountain of absolutely fantastic writing prose you are capable of. How you were able to lead me to Kashike's doubting of her lover and pity spiral that she fell into and get me to believe it from her point of view, then flipping it around when she was able to actually talk to Naruto about how she felt. Like goddamn that was such a real moment. Despite your story having fantastical elements I can absolutely empathize with them both in that moment.
I have no idea how you keep every character and their primary motivations and reasonings straight because i'll be reading along and then something will happen and then i'll think to myself 'Oh holy shit that makes so much sense that that character would come to that realization'. I remember how you mentioned you wanted the information warfare between everyone to be like submarines bouncing sonar signals off each other and you execute on that concept masterfully.
I really, really, really love your writing. I hope you keep up with it. I'll be eagerly reading anything you post.
Best of luck, Fictionalfoxtrot