(#) Rous 2006-12-01
Um, personally, I find it humorous. Not in a radically funny way, just humorous.
I do think that some more punctuation would help the reading.
Otherwise, this is a great poem. Do you post at any poetry sites? I can steer you to a great one. If interested, let me know.
Author's response
i've posted at poetry.com . But if you know another one i'll be intrested. thanks for the review :D