i can tell by your author's note at the beginning that you aren't one-hundred percent secure with this story. let me be the one to reassure you that it is fucking amazing. so amazing, in fact, that i am going to use my second to last rating point on it. you like those apples?
here's a list for you:
1.)/Heroin? I didn't write that...and I certainly wouldn't come here for my narcotics. / hahahaha. i love your sense of humor, and how it shines through on your characters.
2.)/After the attack on Aisle 8, yielding no survivors, I headed for the produce section. It somewhat balanced out my sweet tooth./ you are terribly witty and i love you for it.
3.)/"Taco Vender Turns Tiny UFO Into Alien Sombrero. Fascinating." / hahaha. the visual...it's fantastic.
4.)the interaction between Jocelyn and Charlie is very realistic. her way of mothering her daughter, and playing along with her. i loved it. not to mention the ending...how did her husband die?
you better continue with this story, otherwise the DoJ will get medieval on your ass.
Author's response
And I shall reward your generous rating point by...rating your review. I'm not sure how the "point system" works and I know there is an explanation of it on the site, but instead of reading it, I took a nap. But yeah, thanks for the review. I was getting a little discouraged, but I knew you'd get around to reviewing. And I hate to say this, but "Taco Vendor Turns Tiny UFO into Alien Sombrero was an actual article in one of the those corny magazines. I always remembered it and vowed to put it in a story. Anyway, yeah, I'm a little insecure about this story, but I know the DoJ will help me through if I needed it.