Well, it just semi-suck. And that's why you're just getting a semi-rating point. ;)
My favs:
Scanned his vitals, scanned his wife, looked back to the charts. -> I like parallel sentence constructions if they actually mean something. Like this one. I love little tidbits like this one. :)
repetitively stroking his forehead, if he was awake, he surely would've swatted her hand away by now. -> I have the feeling this is Bea thinking. Right? Like she (thinks she) knows Pete better than anyone else.
Ayla is Pete’s daughter. That is just perfect. For drama, at least. ;)
I am stunned by your insight into the medical profession. All those tubes and liquids and wiping mouths. ;) It’s great ambiance, Katy!
Pete had a very “good” and convincing reason to OD. Very good work on the plot, I believe.
Any chaper that alludes to Pretty Spice and Strange Spice is another milestone for the DoJ.
Plonk.
Author's response
ok stop being nice, you know I hated this chapter. Ok, well I might as well say thanks. so..."Thank You Alex" Thanks for picking up on those lines. Be prepared for more angsty drama!