you are good at keeping promises. score one point for you.
Pete sat up, and looked over at Meg in the bed beside him. The bed was beside him, pervs, not Meg. your humor again. i love it.
Meg watched his lips, and put her arm out, looking for words, but she didn't know any this time. This time, she was speechless... the way you worded that was perfect.
"Do you see these hands? They're doing this because of you. They know what they know now, because of what I thought you were teaching me." gah. i loved that. i think that dialog is fantastic and it proves how far patrick was/is willing to go for her.
the way you end your chapters makes me weak in the knees. He was singing, and even though she couldn't hear him, she could feel him. It wasn't enough. It would never be enough. major kudos to patrick for being a fucking genius. i knew this was going to be in this chapter, but i didn't envision it like this. it was a million times better than what my imagination came up with.
i think you hit the nail on the head with this one, pretty spice. take a rating point.