Alex, new level, you truly are amazing. The scene at the beginning was moving, I love how you use that knowledge to give us insight into something we couldn't possibly understand. The depth you added to Laura was beautiful. I love imperfections but I do find them hard to write, you don't, you write them how they should be done, like it's normal. Because they are.
/With her trademark calm voice and patience like an angel she sat me down and explained to me that even though she couldn't imagine a life without riding anymore, she also couldn't imagine a life without me anymore. That horses meant the world to her, but that I was her world. That she loved sitting on Shiva but that she loved it even more if I was around to watch her. Way to play to the ego of young Pete Wentz, I can tell you that.
/ I just smiled inside at this bit.
When Pete was talking to her Mom, that was intense and then Laura's cheeriness just reminded the readers of the type of character she is. /Cheerful, as if she didn't know it any other way.
/ That was powerful.
The last section for me was moving, that's why I've rated it is as that, I think because when he says "I hate you" you note that he looks in the mirror and at his reflection and that it hadn't changed...but clearly he has changed, inside, his mechanical thinking, his processing of accounts in his life. Maybe I'm reading too deep into it but even if I am, let me enjoy it because I'm so impressed right now, i'm running out of ways to kiss your ass.
Hoping the sickness is having minimal effect on you my dear wife. Speak soon.
xx
~K
Author's response
I feel like an asshole (spice) for not having more to say than: THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS REVIEW, WIFEY! :)))
Way to play to the ego of silly FrostedGlass, I can tell you that. DoJhug
P.S.: You're right about the "Inner Pete" being in a state of change. ;)