Review for Divide and Conquer

Divide and Conquer

(#) Trinda 2006-12-15

The story really reminds me of the TV show, wich can be a good thing or a bad thing. The bad thing is that Delilah and Julius seem to get out of the situations way too easily and we don't get to see how they do that. Like how Delilah is burried under the snow but then she's all of a sudden kicking Ice's butt? Don't get me wrong, I though that was a really cute line with how Julius won't kick a girl but Delilah will, but I wanna see more of a stuggle for the characters. That's just my opinion though. And for the good thing? That there's humor in the story and how you thought about certain aspects of the mission, like ie; How in the beginning You have it so the winds are so high the Helicopter couldn't go any father up. It makes the story seem even more impressive. Good job! Can't wait for a next chapter!

Author's response

Thanks for your honesty. I will definitely remember to go into detail about how they escape. And trust me there will be plenty of times when they need to escape. I just love to put in twists. :) Thanks for the complements, I'm glad that you like my story.