First of all, great title. LOVE IT.
And secondly, the banter between Harry and Patrick is amazing.
'"Technically, you're my partner in crime." I said smugly.
"Damn. You're sly."
"I'm short, I pull it off."
"Do I?"
"No."
"But I'm short"
"Not short enough"
"Oh, is there a requirement?"
"No."
"Right."
"Right."
"I'm confused."
"Well you're short, it happens."'
I actually laughed out loud. Priceless. Anyway, even though it was terribly sad, the suspense was written so well! As I was reading I found myself glancing down at the bottom of the screan involuntarily just to see what was going to happen (curse these eyes!). It was just simply amazing... I was moved. ;)