(#) Rous 2006-04-12
I started this, but the formatting made it too difficult on my eyes. If you would separate the paragraphs with a blank line, I would dearly love to revisit it.
Also, in your epilogue, I noticed the repetition of the word "lost". I think it would benefit the story to try and say this in a different way. I did not get the opportunity to feel out the rest of the story in this respect. It is just something you may want to address.
Looking forward to reading this. Thank you for sharing.