I really like your writing style. However, your chapters are not really chapters. Don't be in a hurry. The readers will be here, and trust me we can appreciate a chapter that shows the reader took her time weaving her tale more so than a rushed pragraph. Now don't get me wrong. I really believe you have talent, but try taking that talent to the next level. Lengthen your stories. personally I write between ten and sixteen pages per chapter. I am not saying you should do like wise, but I think at least eight pages is a good start. Plus, Im willing to bet longer chapters will get you more reviews. Just my humble opinion. Anyway, keep up the good work!