I have to agree with MyVengefulRomance's fan-girl-ish review (haha, I love her, I really do), that you really need to post more of this. The details really drew you in and added a definate original quality to it. It was excellent.
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Woo! Thank you so much!! I was like jumping around my room I was so happy about these reviews! I'll post more today if I can just for you guys :D