Well, so far, I have to say that it is an original concept. I'm a bit disappointed with your description of the fight scene. Having stated your depth of training, I would have expected more detail in the fight scene. Still, very entertaining.
Author's response
Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. The fight scene I assume you're referring to is the one outside of the the Headmaster's office. The original version of that was, err, a blood bath. I compromised with my betas and dropped the gore factor. As to the mechanical aspects, this is the first fiction (non-technical piece) I've written in something like 13 or 14 years, so I'm still working out logistics of it. I don't want to bore the uninterested with detailed angles, vectors, and body mechanics/alignments ... but I also don't want to gloss it all over as "ooo, I read a book about that once..." or "I saw a lot of cartoons (anime/manga now, I guess) and it looked easy" ... I appreciate the thought. When you get through the end of Chapter 20 (20 still in late beta, he's making an international move, so..), and you've reached the end of the third major fight scene, let me know if you still feel the same way, would you? At any rate. Glad you're entertained.