Holy sweet Loki. I thought I had read some bad fanfiction in my time, and was immune to the effects. This story has made me feel differently. I tried to read as far as I could, and I made it to about chapter five before having to quickly go read something better. I felt literal pain from reading this.
What is wrong about it? Just about everything. The premise is the most overused one in Harry Potter fanfiction. The characters are one dimensional. The spelling, grammar, and word choice are so poor as to be mistaken for a sixth graders'. The writing itself is very unimpressive and it brings nothing even remotely interesting to the table.
Now that I have expressed what I thought of it, I would like to apologize. I don't mean my words as a personal attack so much as...Well, just displaying how bad I thought this story was.
Author's response
I understand what you say. But can I tell you something funny. This story is the most successful story of all. Only the Lord Baron Potter has 800,124 hits/reads, Lord and Lady Baron Potter has only 701,761 hits/reads. My third most successful story has 'Kill the Magical World' with 31,811 hits/reads.
For some it is hard to read, for the majority it is not.
I need to tell you this, that I have serious problems continuing writing the Lord and Lady Baron Potter, because I agree with you. But I don't want to give up, and I want to finish what I have started.
Wim