brilliant! you definitely need to send this on for the contest. just read through it a few more times, because there were a few spelling errors, sentence fragments, blah, blah, and it was only a bit confusing in the beginning with the switch between characters, but other than that it was amazing. I love the concept of Hell being in his mind and the walls getting smaller.
awesome favorites and good luck with the contest
~kettles
Author's response
Thank you very much for telling me about the spelling errors kicks Microsoft Word that's exactly the kind of input that I need. I'll try to fix up the confusingness. Takes the Kettles' advice and begins to reread.