Wow!!!! I'm impressed. This is really well written, I was completely drawn in after one paragraph. I love how you write the action scenes; they're exiting, without being over detailed. Hurry and post the next chapter, 'cause I'm dying to know what happens next.
I also like how you're critical of religious men, without being critical of religion. Your concept of his magic being an extension of Goddess' power is good too, different from a lot of fantasy stories I've read. Grin I love your girl God, it seems like in a lot of stories I've read the only time you get female deities is if its in a polytheistic religion. (Of course, it could be a polytheistic religion, with the other deities being unmentioned…oh well).
Anyway, I’m really enjoying it so far, so keep going! ^_^