"Snap out of it man the fans are starting to notice. Music now, Ollie later." Joe hissed at me as he strode back across the stage. -> I love Joe. He’s such a professional. sighs Professionally rude, too.
Ach, poor Logan. And he’s such a cutie, really.
Ha ha, Ollie is so desperate and self-loathing. I gotta love her.
Your vocabulary and general narration skills always overwhelm me. looks like a fool And HOW do you manage to portray so many characters so meticulously?
Pete’s well definied muscles. Yup, I have to give that to him.
Have a point. Have all my points. Have my left leg. For Ollie.
Amazing. :)
Author's response
Everyone loves Joe now! I think it's like a plague, eventually it will consume us all. Ollie probably wont be self loathing too much anymore, not if she finally gets some! Ah the many POV's yes...well...they tend to make me wanna hit something but i love them all the same! Thank you for the review, my assignments dont seem quite so bad anymore! XX