Review for Game Bored

Game Bored

(#) MarkPoa 2007-01-11

Nice. I like the beat in this story brought about by the repetition of "you". I think you missed the meter at a point, though, since a part felt short.

Author's response

Thanks so much for reading and taking time to review. Yes, I think I've found the point you're thinking of, and I agree, it seems I've missed something there. I'll work on rearranging the line. Thanks again for the help!