The explanation of Ava’s hate for spiders was mighty fancy. Super! I feel the same way about birds. The jerky motions hold true for them, too. Yuck.
swallows down a lump in her throat Top-notch work on the spider-scene: Suspense. Excitement. One-noun sentences.
This chapter was just incredible. The flowiness. The emotions. Which made me advance to two two-word sentences.
Please, not even the FOBz could have made this chapter any better. You are awesome. And that’s a fact.
I have been wondering: How did you come up with “Lemmings”? Cos that is one cool last name. :)
Update soon. It always makes me squeal in delight.
Author's response
Yes, I could see how birds would be scary as well... stupid jerky movements.
And I don't really know how I came up with Lemmings. Normally when I create the characters I just think up a first name, then when it comes time to say the last I'll just put down whatever is on my mind for that moment. Ava Lemmings just seemed to fit. But who knows. Maybe I heard someone say it somewhere...