corrections: lingerie, horcrux(es)
Comments: A horcrux is a very secret, very taboo piece of dark arts. No way is it common knowledge, nor would the Ministry allow knowledge of such to be disseminated. The DA wouldn't know until Ron & Hermione let them in on it. Hermione suddenly becoming "all girly-girl" with the make-up is odd. Ron & Hermione would be more distraught if Harry was out there alone. They seem almost flippant.
Questions: Is this a Harry/Hermione piece? Why isn't Hermione Head Girl?
Overall grade: B