FicWad

This fic has a lot of good points and a lot of bad ones.

It's packed with good magic fighting and action. I was glad to see a villain that's not only grotesque and threatening but also in possession of a creative origin. I enjoyed the little sections written from Kazar's point of view.
The relationships between the characters is written very well, and I enjoyed the way they interacted as well as the bits of humor that surfaced every once in a while. Also, "Hell itself couldn't claim me right now; I'm not ready to die" is one of the most badass lines I've read in a fic in a long while. It fit Magus and that situation perfectly.

On the other hand, the whole fic is rife with spelling, grammatical and capitalization errors, especially things such as confusing "site" for "sight," etc.
There are also very troubling logic errors. There's supposed to be a sea between Porre and Chorus, and more water (plus an island) between Chorus and Guardia castle. To suggest that the party WALKED to these points, much less within a couple of days, is ridiculous. Another problem to consider is that, according to at least two of the game's endings (including the "regular" endings), all the time gates have vanished. The ending of this fic suggests that the gates still exist.
For the most part Magus was characterized well and I really liked him, but in chapter two he suddenly became weak and a little dense. Magus, getting out of breath from walking? The guy's supposed to be a tank, magically AND physically. And then later he jumps through a window and doesn't think to use his magic to cushion the landing, after he'd hovered just about half the way to that town to start with? And why doesn't he kill the man that first attacked him? It would have been much more logical (and Magus-like) to kill the attacker (which would've taken about five seconds or less, since Magus was already armed, so the "saving time" excuse really isn't much).

All said, I do like this fic and hope for more parts in the future.