Review for Resurrection III: Stolen Fayth

Resurrection III: Stolen Fayth

(#) fyre_byrd 2006-05-06

I love the coversation between Lulu and Kihmari. I like the way he is so subtle about prodding her out of her shell. I like the way she gets so incredibly prickly, but still can't help but respond to his laconic questions.

I like that Auron's presence soothes Lulu into a decent sleep at last. I love your decription of her body. It's very lovely.

"Lulu kept drifting into the fringes of nightmares and clawing her way out again like a boat navigating a treacherous reef." I hate to be obnoxious, but you've mixed your metaphors. I keep trying to picture a boat clawing its way out of a reef.

"Fire in the heart. Ice is in the bones. Thunder in the mind. Water in the womb." I would omit "is" after ice for the sake of consistency.