Review for Red Planet - Part One: Invasion

Red Planet - Part One: Invasion

(#) whipblade 2007-01-30

Ahh, while re-reading this in hopes of getting SOME inspritation. Glares at Snoozing Mace I found this, I thought you might want to edit ^_~

Forgetting the dark and weather, he saddled up again, heading once more towards Cody's bar.
A few miles down the road, the (bar's name) came into view. From his vantage point, Stoker couldn't see anything amiss. But drawing closer there seemed to be some kind of commotion outside. He abandoned his bike and headed towards the small crowd that had formed outside the doorway of the bar.

Author's response

HAHAHHAHAHA! I knew it, I KNEW I would forget about that the moment I wrote it. That's brilliant, I love it. I might keep it in just for the sheer stupidity of it. :)
Thanks though! Hope you feel inspired soon! It usually happens when you're not thinkig about it at all.